Project 4, Exercise 1. The Road

Different narration- First Person,

“I was pushing the cart and the boy and I both carried knapsacks. In the knapsacks where  things we needed in case we had to abandon the cart and run for it. Clamped to the handle of the cart was a chrome motorcycle mirror that I used to watch the road behind us. I shifted the pack higher on my shoulders and looked out over the wasted country. The road was empty. Below in the little valley the still grey serpentine of a river. Motionless and precise. Along the shore a burden of dead reeds. Are you okay? I said. He nodded to me. We set out along the blacktop in the gunmetal light, shuffling through the ash, each the other’s world entire.”

Different narration, Third Person,

“You pushed the cart and both you and I carried knapsacks. In the knapsacks were the essentials in case we had to make a run for it. Clamped to the handle of the cart was a chrome motorcycle mirror that you used to watch the road behind us. You moved the pack higher on your shoulders and looked out over the wasted country. The road was empty. Below in the little valley the still grey serpentine of a river. Motionless and precise. Along the shore a burden of dead reeds. Are you okay? You said. I nodded. We set out along the blacktop in the gunmetal light, shuffling through the ash, each the other’s world entire.”

Changing the narrative from the mans to the boys point of view shifts the story and tells it through different eyes. He is an innocent and as the reader knows it is a child talking we are taking all of his words to heart more. The image of the rucksack being carried by him with everything in they both need to survive is upsetting as he is hasn’t any choice in this matter. The man’s point of view gives the reader a steady character, an adult view of the world, the danger and the hardships that haven’t yet been completely felt by the boy.

By keeping the narrator omniscient us the readers can see both sides of the story and depending on who is speaking we can build a picture of both characters, however not fully but this leaves the story to unfold on its own.

 

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